Common Rhyme & Meter errors

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After reading so much rhyme and meter I thought it might be useful for me to point out some of the more common errors that I came across, without naming names of course.

Ok – here is a rhyming couplet

But jumping was the only thing that brought Peter joy
He just jumped so much that his parents he would annoy

Does it rhyme? Yes it does. Does it have a predictable meter? Not really. And is it written the way we would speak naturally or has it been twisted to fit the rhyme? I would say yes, the second line has been written in a convoluted manner and as such sounds forced. In natural speech we would be more likely to say –

He jumped so much that he annoyed his parents.

But written this way – it doesn’t rhyme with ‘joy’.

So how can we fix it?

The first thing that I like to do is to insert all the syllables into a grid like so…

GridsWhat I’m looking for is a pattern made with the columns. Columns should be all red or all black. As you can see, at the moment, there is no discernible pattern. Which means there is no beat (the stressed syllables provide the beat) which means there is no meter, no tune if you like.

So what might I suggest?

Grids 2If we look closely we can see that the words (or part there of) that are stressed are the ones that give the sentence meaning. So in the first line we have

jump, only, Peter, enjoyed

and in the second line we have

parents, grumpy, very, annoyed

so even though we are missing 9 words we can still make sense of what is being said.

So if we can work out which syllables are stressed we can see from these grids where and why the meter is or isn’t working.

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